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Jeff!

Mr Ball — Sun, 02 May 2010 06:02:03 +0000

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I was walking down the street one day and I was listening to what people say

Jeff walking into the girls bathroom

The Twits — Wed, 31 Mar 2010 10:50:44 +0000

Jeff walked through a door and a girl with red hair and freckle face was washing her hands.

“What are you doing here” asked the girl

“huh” Jeff said puzzled.

“This is the girls bathroom” screamed the girl jeff ran out and the girl screamed THERES A BOY IN THE GIRLS BATHROOM

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I was walking down the street one day and I was listening to what people say

Jeff in the girls bathroom

The Twits — Fri, 26 Mar 2010 20:36:22 +0000

“AHHHHHH!”"Jeff What are you doing in here?” said Lorrie

“Ohhhh no!”said Jeff.(embaressed)

“Hey everybody!There’s a boy in the girls bathroom.”

All the girls said “I dont belive you!” Whispered the girls.

“Come out and look then.” said Lorrie.

All the girls came out and screamed from the top of there voices.

“AHHHHHHHHHH. Get out of here.”

By Kirstie

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Help needed

Mr Ball — Thu, 18 Mar 2010 09:37:49 +0000

How could you help Jessica improve this piece of writing?

Jeff entering the girls bathroom

once there was a boy called Jeff he needed the loo so he put his hand up and the teacher whispered”go then”

so then he was doodling down the corridor until he saw the toliets AND GUESS WHAT HE DONE! he went into the girls bathroom and saw lorrie and she said “hello jeff what you doing in here”

he said” im going to the toliet”

lorrie said”OH NO YOU ARENT GET OUT OF HERE”

so off went Jeff to the boys toliets and had th loo there

UNTIL he went back to class and saw lorrie and lorrie started laughing at him and told her friends that she saw Jeff in the girls bathroom and her friends started laughing as well he felt dissipointed BLESS HIS HEART

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I was walking down the street one day and I was listening to what people say

Jeff entering the girls bathroom

The Twits — Fri, 12 Mar 2010 09:08:24 +0000

once there was a boy called Jeff he needed the loo so he put his hand up and the teacher whispered”go then”

so then he was doodling down the corridor until he saw the toliets AND GUESS WHAT HE DONE! he went into the girls bathroom and saw lorrie and she said “hello jeff what you doing in here”

he said” im going to the toliet”

lorrie said”OH NO YOU ARENT GET OUT OF HERE”

so off went Jeff to the boys toliets and had th loo there

BY JESSICA

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